Luke comes home from college to find his younger brother and sister have grown closer than ever. Luke feels left out and confused. He'd always been attracted to to his sister Kim, but now Danny is looking more like his sister every day, and Luke is sure that something unusual is going on.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 2.00
- Characters: 4.33
- Technical: 4.33
Swellhugs
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Really liked this story. I second Muad's comments.
My only critiqe would be that Danni gets misgendered here and there but that's not a huge deal when the rest of the story slaps and it's clearly just a simple error.
Amazing work and I really hope to see a second part come soon!
Cryadis
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Same as before imo the best story of the stories posted by the user recently.
It really calls for a Part 2 and am I am looking forward to it. Currently any BE is offstage, but the setting is quite unique and the story really catches on.
Muad
Overall= 5, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I liked this one the most out of the recent post dump.
Had a similar feeling while reading it than I had with a story a while back, bringing up feelings of jealousy, uncertainty, basically making me go through everything the main character did. But This story had the payoff it needed, even if it left me wanting more. But that's when I realized it was part 1. Definitely need the continuation.
As for the BE content, there is not much or it's implied. Yes there is some size changing happening, but it's in the background, just revealed that it has happened, more so describing the result than the change itself. Although that lends a bit more to the believable nature to it.
All in all this is a good story and definitely looking towards more of this.
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