Eva was playing her Switch during a storm and a near miss added something to her game system.
A short story but I hope you enjoy. Leave a review on my stories to help me make them better, please.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 1.50
- BE: 1.50
- Characters: 1.50
- Technical: 1.25
Nah
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Daichi Lu Azure
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
This story is more of a proof of concept draft that needs to be fleshed out more. My advice is to give more description to what's going on in the scene, e.g. describe the environment, the characters, the room and the events going on in the tale. A bit of padding to tell the story makes for a better read.
bleh
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Dudedudeicoff
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 1
This story is very much just a concept. A thing that happened. Were I to describe this story in one sentence not a lot would be lost.
If you want to improve your writing, you need to focus on drawing things out a bit, creating suspense or some kind of subversion rather than just getting straight to the money shot.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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