First story I have written. Focuses on female inflation. Includes gore. 18+
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.80
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 3.80
Karen
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Definitely doesn't belong on this site BUT It's one of the better reads in a while.
I liked the description
AND
I like that it's a set up for more of the story later.
Maybe Include more BE as well as inflation in the chapters to come??
NakNak90
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Okay so this is torture porn, straight up. But it's also highly fetish relevant.
Now, I imagine this is going to get shot to hell, but there's a reader base for this kind of thing and even if that isn't me, i took the time to read it and its more descriptive than half of the trash i've waded through.
It might only be a few people's cup of tea, but I'm sure the people in to it find things like this few and far between and for what it is, it's quite good and I genuinely hope the author submits more.
Anon
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
A solid 4 all the way around. Not usually into the blueberry stuff, but I really enjoyed the graphic details of what was happening to her body... as dark and disturbing as that is, I think we need more of that hyperrealism.
ZS
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Just wanted to include a comment for readers, just be aware, which the author does recognize in the beginning of the piece, that this is tonally very dark, graphic, and potentially highly disturbing, on the spectrum of guro.
Marcus55
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great story, exciting. Few spelling errors,easy to overlook.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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