The Overflowing Bra

Took me a while to get through this. I downloaded it day 2 and didn't finish till today granted having my own work to do impacts that, I was actually eager with the early ratings making me think of my own works. Universal destruction? Consequences? My jam.

However, I stumbled a lot. Grammatical errors take me out of the emersion, and there's some formatting that just stalled me. Quick back and forth conversations weren't spaced like the rest of the story, and that often made it feel... Off. Unpolished.

Now Roy, I would personally have punished him more severely. His upper hand in situations makes sense, and is played out very logically. I think a lot of my character rating just comes down to really not liking him. He is an absolute monster, and a believable monster I've met my share of men like him, and that growing vitriol had me wishing his cumupins was more than an offhanded sentence at the end.

For the BE aspects, it was brief. I didn't mind it per say, but context is everything. Bra letter sizes especially past a certain point don't really mean anything, so leaning so heavily on them in base description just results in a poor mental picture of the scene, and the characters. The quantity in the beginning is where the story gets its points.

Overall, eh. A lot of that though may be writing myself and having trouble getting into others' work as well anymore. So grain of salt.

I really enjoyed this story.  It was sexy, funny, and hit all the buttons.  It had a lot of unexpected twists to it  not the usual asshole gets what is coming scenario, nor just a Mary Sue.

Sure, more descriptions would have been nice, and Roy IS an awful person, but that's kind of the point.

And thank you for not neglecting male transformation portion.  Obviously, that is not the point of this site, but it's half the kink for me.

Really nice story. Always a pleasure to read your great work.

Think the others were a tad harsh. I really enjoyed the story it was a lot of fun and what I have come to expect from your work. Great job

For a story based around fetishes there is very little in the way of fetish fuel. No descriptions of breast growth, for example its just and then they grew to X size which is incredibly lame. The rest of your writing is quite good however, if a bit lengthy between juicy bits. 

God, Roy is an awful person. I was really hoping he'd get his comeuppance by the end, but he really didn't. It's just the entire universe gets destroyed.