A dissolving state of mind.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.00
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 2.67
- Technical: 2.67
FrigOfFury
Overall= 2, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I think it was a little unfair to rate the story low because of its length. Its erotic flash fiction and thats okay. Its not especially my kind of thing, but I feel it has a place. Having said that, it creeped me out a little when right at the end she said she was going to save myself for some special guy, which doesnt seem very bimboish to me. Maybe thats a male fantasy of a virgin bimbo? It doesnt make sense to me, at least. Likely I am not the right audience.
YupYiGoo
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Too short for a proper retort.
Russian Judge
Overall= 2, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Far too short, more of a scene than a story. If this nameless woman had someone to interact with, this would be better. Back to the word processor, please.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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