The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Rick McGuffin, Private Investigator
A future noir tale about genetic modifications, lost loves, and a breasts that can inflate like balloons...
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Loved it. MC is great, almost like Casablanca's Rick. Needs more BE, but that's what further chapters can fix.
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 4
The story is technically fine.

On the other hand, there's very little BE, and I completely hate the main character.

Please write main characters who aren't regressive douchecanoes. I spent the entire time reading distracted by the fact that I completely hated the main character.
A Reader
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Pleeeaaase continue 
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