The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Steve Palmer
Spider Bites (re-upload)
To reiterate: An explorer trekking through the rain forest witnesses a female tribe's coming-of-age ritual utilizing an exotic spider, then brings it back with him to share with a female colleague.

Sorry about that last version. All files should be there this time. Thanks to "Someone" for pointing out the issue.

Check out the text document for a discovery I made involving
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Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
Incorrect URL in the reuploaded txt file, it reads bearvhive instead of bearchive.

I've either read this story before or something very similar, likely also found here on the overflowing bra.

The transition between scenes could have been spaced out and split up better, right now it's just on going text lines.

The sudden transformation growth spurt happening offstage felt a bit cheap and her actual breast size felt a bit under detailed. The amazon native had proper description or at least a reference to a honeydew melons and being bigger, is a good point of reference for the needed visualization within the mind. Beyond this point Dr. Summers isn't detailed to what size she starts with and with what she ends up other than the art that is included.
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
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