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The Overflowing Bra

Madam Materia
A Night Out
A Madam Materia commission. Materia recieves a mysterious invitation to meet doctor Lessien Viris. As women of similar interests they decide upon a little competition, pitting the doctor's science versus the Madam's magic in a public setting, to do their best. Or would it be considered their worst?
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Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent Story!
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Compensating in score a bit because some idiot is sabotaging ratings on this site because he doesn't know how to increase font size. I thought it was pretty good.
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
1st, the story is in 11 point font. Which isn't small.
2nd, it's a .docx, you can change the font size and type. 
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
PLEASE stop posting stories in so small a font size  this makes it difficult to read through the first page or so to decide whether or not I'm interested. Yes, I am aware that the story is 24 pages as it is  but pagecount online is meaningless.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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