The onset of puberty brings fast changes to an 18 year old girl and soon she finds out that she likes it not a bit. A nightmare starts for her, which gets worse and worse the bigger her breasts get.
She learns firsthand what it feels like to get breasts that get bigger and bigger: From no breasts, to small breasts, to big breasts, to huge breasts, to breasts that are that huge that she becomes immobile.
I copied a discontinued classic from 1999, rewrote it, turned the perception of the central character from positive to negative, continued it and finished it.
This is the 2nd revision. Removed a lot of typos. Went much more into detail.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.50
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 3.50
- Technical: 3.50
JohnDoe1974
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Since this is an old story i have read the original again and i must say, i like the original story way more. The grow thing was not so negativ and the family theme is also much better with the help of the other family members. The milk thing is not bad, but why is Robert the only one of the family who interacts here? I would never put my daughter into this hell. There are some good ideas but i think it would be better if you had followed more on the original plot with the good family support.
But its a start into writing and not too bad, so please go on
Red
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Awesome! Please, a sequel!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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