Another girl pays a visit to HellMart and gets the famous diary enabling her to rewrite the life of anyone. What about her own? Sometimes, it's not the flat girl who wants to grow...
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.71
- BE: 3.86
- Characters: 4.43
- Technical: 4.29
Astheriom
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Olly69
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I really like the idea of the story. But you pass to fast through everything and to the end of the story it becomes a little weird.
I hope you will write a third story of Her Diary. Please let them have more experiences with their new body. Once she was slim, the effect was over. No real benefits of her ability to eat as much as she wants to, no further changing in how firm she was, no abs, no modification of her breasts, except the size, which only was a number an a letter. You could have made them more firm, more round, bigger nipples, what ever. But nothing.
Also there were to much changing of the other people. Why didn't she bought a diary with their name on it to change them?
Would like to read more how somebody else takes advantage over diary.
deuxanges
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This is a great story. There were some grammatical and typographical errors but these were generally very minor and did not affect the overall enjoyment. It would be nice to have more scenes of BE but otherwise very good writing. Keep it up!
TitQueen
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
holy shit, amazing amazing amazing. I m half way through only and this is the best BE story i have ever read.
JohnDoe1974
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very good story
For my taste there could more boob grow and bigger, but this storyline is very good, was fun to read it.
Boris
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Glad to read another story from you. Very nice as always.
Child of Light
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
This story lacks the finesse of the original Her Diary. The original ended with a wonderful twist leaving us wondering whether Mike or Dana were the ones in control. The present changing to accommodate the new past fits bitch better in your short prose form of writing.
However, this story lacks that. Jane just seems like the primary character of Bitch Ring placed into a new setting. Mindy is supposed to be the target of her disdain, but most of Mindy
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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