A lot of guys have slept with the girl next door. Even more have slept with a cheerleader. Not many have sampled both and remained in a happy relationship, but you have. In fact, while there are fantasies abound of sleeping with celebrities, you've done that too. You've done it all since you started dating Michelle, and you haven't cheated on her once. You have as many stories as there are nights in a year. This is one of them.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.40
- BE: 4.60
- Characters: 3.40
- Technical: 4.40
Eddie
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Nice start. Hope there will be much more. The you style is offputting, which account for the low score.
oneeyedjack
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Incredible first effort. I really liked the premise, and I think it has incredible potential. My only real complaint was that it was too short could have used another scene, but I'm really looking forward to the next installement. Keep up the good work!
xorand
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great start, look forward to seeing more in this series.
Jovian16
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I really like the premise of the story! One thing I'd hoped to see more of, from the title, was more detailed descriptions of the girlfriend transforming into other women both celebrities and not and taking on a new personality with her new, busty identity.
Would you consider including more of that in the next chapters?
Wolf
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Character introduction was a little clunky, but once the story got traction its quickly forgotten. Very good writing, hope to see more of your work in future!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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