The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Bad Irving
Unknown
Witch Wish
Doing a favor for a witch gives a man one wish.
Average Scores:
 pnb
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5 
ginger is good but moves to slow
 Dinner
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 2 
Ginger was perfect, but I really didn't care for anything else—it felt too sarcastic. I think the premise of the story is rather amusing, but it definitely could have been done better. You also really need to work on your composition skills. You had a lot of run-ons, fragments, and weirdly-constructed sentences. o_O;
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
Due to comment spam, any new posts with http in them will be destroyed.
Your Nickname: 

Rate this story from 1-5 stars (5 stars is best) in the following categories:

Overall Enjoyment(How much did you like the story overall?)

	 1
	 2
	 3
	 4
	 5

BE Description (Detail, quantity, quality)

	 1
	 2
	 3
	 4
	 5

Characters (Descriptions, likeability)

	 1
	 2
	 3
	 4
	 5

Technical Quality (Writing style, grammar, etc.)

	 1
	 2
	 3
	 4
	 5

Your comments on the story: