Women in Rachel's family are busty. But the redhead would like to be even bustier. Good thing her best friend can magically steal anything from anyone and give it to someone else...
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.33
- BE: 2.67
- Characters: 4.33
- Technical: 3.67
Wildcard
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Really enjoyed the story, despite the limited BE description and things were mostly described through bra sizes, it didn't bother me at first, but as things progressed and things grew bigger and bigger, it became somewhat annoying. The lower cup size ranges are easier to imagine, but as the bust size increases even further things become more difficult. Visualizing them becomes much easier when they are compared with objects, may it be fruit, toy balls or other means of describing there size, trough measurements, arms lengths and so on, it all aids the reader to visualize things.
Etrian
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
My major criticism is that, for a BE story, we don't know how big her breasts are. I feel describing the weight, size, shape, etc. would have helped. Also, gigantomastia often leads to lopsided breasts. How did she get around this? How did the people around her respond? All of these enhance the feeling of BE.
FleshFan
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
This story is right up my alley! A crazy girl who wants to grow without end! But maybe you could have described her breasts a little more. Like, how do they look in a bra, how without, how do her nipples look, and her areola, how big are her nipples and so on. Also,sadly, your writing mistakes seems to have gotten a little more. Maybe you can check your words with a proof read function like the one in MS Word or the like? But overall a great story!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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