The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Spring Breasts
May and Alex are on Spring Break, ready for a crazy week of fun. Things gets crazier when May finds a real genie in a lamp...
Average Scores:

Dan Standing
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Fantastic. Loved all your work but this one had a genie so I had to finally share my enjoyment.
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I liked this one as well as most of your work. Your English skills are better than many people's, who's native language is English.
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Another great effort. As always, I liked the twist at the end. There were a small number of typos maybe 45 but they were minor and did not detract from the overall enjoyment. I suggest maybe using the spell checker on the software. 
Wild Card
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Really enjoyed this story, even though early on I already had a good sense of what direction the story would go and how it would end.

May's Spring Break sense adventure was quickly clear, what possibly made the whole story somewhat predictable.

Even though not that short, it felt a bit fast paced.
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