Mike needs a birthday present for his best friend, Dana. At HellMart, he finds a Diary. A Diary with every detail about Dana's life. And he can even edit them!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.75
- BE: 4.19
- Characters: 4.56
- Technical: 4.13
8008fan
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
I love the breezy style you have as well as the creativity and the really cool twist at the end.
Jeb
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Amazing story! Well done.
Roid Abuser
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very clever. Indeed, spectacular.
But how come he didn't write I saw my roommate naked Mike in the bathroom. His workouts have really paid off. He looks like he should be on the cover of a fitness magazine! And his cock! So HUUUUGE! I had to go jill one off thinking about him!
The Martian
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Big fan of your stories Wokod, both here and at writing.com. Keep up the good work!
namrego
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Nice original story, well done
opailopai
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Just all around solid stuff, especially liked the ending.
Reader
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Really Enjoyed this story especially the ending with an unexpected twist. Grammar issues aside, the BE description was a bit lacking, it could have been more detailed, the growth process taking place instead of just an increase bra size garments and the detailing the bra size label, nonetheless it was a interesting alternative growth sequence, so points for taking this approach.
MrHHH
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
My only wish is that it could have been longer.
maybeenuf4u
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Truly a great story. Original twist on a good but tired subject SRU Please write more, you seem to be overcoming the language barrier. I look forward to seeing more of your stories.
deuxanges
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Agree with Some Guy, this is a great story with a nice twist at the end. However, more descriptions of the BE would have been nice. Technical writing quality is very good, so don't worry that it is not your first language.
anon
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Straightforward, clever, and a nice twist at the end.
Some guy
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
This was a great story. I love the premise, and it was well executed. My only gripe is there could have been more detailed description of boob sizes beyond just her cup size.
JohnDoe1974
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Very good, please make more
Stonecorner1
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Hey Wokod, I think your stories are really good. I dont think you have to worry about English not being your first language because your writing is very good. I really love stories where someone changes reality so things were always a certain way with girls growing huge boobs without even realizing it. I hope you can write similar reality changing stories in the future
Etrian
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
Once I reached the end, I realized this story is a deconstruction of your previous kinds of stories.
Wolfvahn
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I will accept this as an apology from your absence on The dictaphone
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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