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The Overflowing Bra

A Maid and a Machine
A story written by a non-english speak. Arrogant Dr John Bowson has a machine able to bend reality itself. He just needs a guinea pig to try it on humans. His maid will do the job!
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Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I like it! Now you got me wondering, are you one of my favorite writers from writing dot com?
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
This was very good! Your english isn't perfect, but its still very good with only a few very small errors here and there. Unlike deuxanges I actually really liked the ending. I definitely would like to see more from you!
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
For a first attempt and not in your native language, I thought it was actually really good. I wish there as a more gradual alteration rather than rather abruptly jumping to planetsized at the end. Also more interactions between the characters.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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