A commission I wrote. A wife and a group of ex-girlfriends have a special something planned for an unsuspecting guy.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.67
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 4.33
Sacha
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Boris
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I loved the whole plot. A little too short.
Eddie
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
The whole thing is too jumbled and confused, although the idea is interesting. I stopped reading in detail about half way through because I didn't care anymore about the plot or the sex. It has the makings of a great story, but it isn't.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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