In Eden, where women can't get married unless their breasts pin them to the ground, Ruth's growth has stalled far short. Searching for answers, she uncovers secrets about the town and her own body that she could never imagine.
This is part 1.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.63
- BE: 4.25
- Characters: 4.75
- Technical: 4.88
reaper of games
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
better then a good start this is a great start. keep up the good work. I look forward to the next part.
Dolphinfan
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Solid groundwork and intriguing premise. Cant wait to see whats next!
Eddie
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I am enticed. Looking forward to part 2.
greatpersonhooray
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
PLEASE write another one!
Pin
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
FleshFan
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Promising start, enough talk about boobs to look over the shortness and missing actual growth, likable characters and world building so far.
Pleas keep on going!
Red
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Superb, just needs some more descriptiveness
GeoffK
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This part is mostly setup, but so far, it's a great story. Technically perfect, with engaging characters, good descriptions and a great premise. Really looking forward to more.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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