An adult themed carnival has a few surprises in story for Mariel
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 4.40
- Characters: 4.60
- Technical: 4.40
Eddie
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Fun story. I liked the character development of the woman from prude to booblusting. Guy didn't change much.
Minor tech note to large should be too large. Different words different meanings.
brit
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Loved this story! Great premise. I especially like the way she goes from prudish to excited about her growth by the end of the story! Her reactions felt completely genuine and her evolution was very believable. My only gripe would be that the growth was too fast and over with, and the depiction of her size and the implications were understated.
beandaelover
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
It was one of the best Ive read in a while. I hope you plan to do another with some other things happening at the carnival with these characters. Maybe even another one similar to this with different characters. Please do another this was awesome.
Vyperion
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Fun, enjoyable, exciting romp.
Boris
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great BE story ! No more to say !
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
Due to comment spam, any new posts with http in them will be destroyed.
