When Rachel signs up for a study to induce lactation in mothers with hormonal problems, she doesn't expect to get in, but sometime screening errors do happen.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.50
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.50
Cahoone
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I greatly enjoy the themes and styles in your work. My one critique is similar Hoorayforboobies The ending seems like snippets of a draft, or the framing of a section, that wasn't completed. I would have liked to have read details of what changed for Rachel at each of these sizes and stages of development. You wrote fill a warehouse with her scent in under five minutes and could cow any woman who took a whiff but we didn't really get to see what that meant in this situation, unlike for instance, your Emma story where we got to read about and experience cowed women or a house full of men under the main character's pheromonal thrall. I think I only even have these thoughts because I have read all of your other works and seen you expand on the details in those.
That small aside, I could fill in the gaps in my head no problem. I enjoyed the story immensely, especially how Rachel's straightforward personality quirk of I don't mind when men seem attracted to me, because it means I have power became a more dominating streak when given a little nudge from some chemicals. It feels more believable and readable than other writers' stories of I used to be a shrinking violet, now I am Mistress Dominatrix, mwahaha! Worship me!
lactose free milk
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 5
Ended kind of abruptly, but the beginning and middle were good. Odd little rant about vegetarianism though lol
Hoorayforboobies
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Really loving these types of stories. Size of the breasts is huge but still in the realm of believable. The ending felt a little rushed but overall still great. Would love more
Nikochan
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great as usual. Thanks for this Christmas gift !
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