Mark and Betty find some nanotech enhancement pills. They take them, are amazed at the results, and then give two of the pills to Jenny and Angela. All of the women end up with enormous breasts.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.40
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 4.20
- Technical: 4.40
Inflagrante Delicto
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great writing, good smut. Keep up the good work. As for suggestions, how about abilitiespowerupswhatever that focus on growth in certain areas. Also try to linger a little more on how the characters feel as they grow. Stretch out the description a little. No pun intended.
Either way, looking forward to future chapters.
Bb47
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Hot! Love the sex scenes!
Giant Fuzzy Pig
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
deus, I hope that part 2 addresses at least some of your concerns. I have writing habits from other fiction 'build a believable world by using details', 'realistically describe the ordinary things' that are less necessary for this kind of story. Trying to adjust. Hoping parts 2 and 3 do that. As I said in another message, posting here requires rating the story. How do authors who are commenting on their own stories usually do that? I'm not trying to be a jerk or artificially jack up my score, just talk to the people who were kind enough to write comments. Thanks,
deus
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Good, but it could use more description, especially around the growth and the sex. I feel like you spend as much time talking about work and what they have for dinner as you do about the BE and sex.
Roid Abuser
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Exactly my kink! Here's to hoping they get stuck at Level 5 forever!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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