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The Overflowing Bra

Order of Operations, Part P
A short tale about Rosslyn, a girl bullied by her friends to go and complete a dare. It does not turn out how she expects. 

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Left Wanting More
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
This was very good! But the story also felt incomplete. It left me with several questions, like what the dare was, who the mysterious entity was supposed to be, why it was called Order of Operations, etc. Almost like you had the idea in your head but it didn't make it to the page. Don't get me wrong, this was sexy and belongs on this site, but hopefully if you continue this or write a new story, you fill in more of the blanks. 
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