My first story, although it is quite long at 90,000 words. This tale follows Jane and Katie and their journey through their blossoming relationship and their vastly changing bodies. Contains lesbian love, bondage, domination and submission, lots of lactation, and of course massive, growing, breasts. Any and all feedback is appreciated and I would direct you to my deviantart page to do so. Thank you, and enjoy!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.46
- BE: 4.46
- Characters: 4.31
- Technical: 4.54
zzz
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
BB
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Favorite story I've read on here. The words were so vivid, only wish there was more
Ktc1221
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I've made my point of not liking Nc stories pretty clearly by now. That said I have tried to change my outright rejection of them and give all stories a fair chance in reading them. Espescially now that I've written my own it's maddening to see something have hundreds, even thousands, of downloads but only 12 comments. I actually found and read this story on deviant art a year or so ago. While I didn't like the inprisonment theme much you take what you can get and I can't deny that the thought of a woman needingwanting me to take care of her because she can't do so herself has a small element of romanticism to it. This story doesn't get violent, something I absolutely abhors in porn, but I've read and enjoyed more. Please don't be discouraged, there was plenty here who loved your writings and it's not that I hated them myself I just didn't like bits of it.
FleshFan
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Great, just great!! I like, when tits grow over the course of at least some days. I'm halfway through and enjoy your story very much! Maybe, just maybe the description of expanding tits could be a little more detailed? But thats complaining on a very high level! And then you would be probably at 100k words...
rt
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
soooo good! but i feel like you forgot about veronika... I sure didn't...
Boobityboo
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
My main complaint in this story is that I felt like Stockholm syndrome settled in far too quickly. Even if it was her deep rooted fantasy, it shouldn't have been mere hours before she accepted it. My second complaint is that a few of the sentences when they spoke sounded a bit forced and too blunt, with no one actually speaking like that in real life. Not even in that situation. Other then these, I think it's a brilliant story with well paced expansion and I would like to see more of your work
bobGrimer
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
It has the tag 'nc' which means 'nonconsensual'. What the fuck did A Concerned Citizen think that meant?
joe
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Yuri
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Grammatically, one of the better stories on the site. It's long, which is nice, but also means you probably won't consume it in one session unless you're edging. The characters are well written, but I felt the stockholm syndrome aspect is a bit rushed. It's rooted in fantasies that probably shouldn't be played out in real life ie kidnapping, but the actual bondage is mostly consensual, except for the villain. The growth could have been described better. It felt like it went really fast.
anony123
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Wow,wow wow. This is seriously amazing and I cant wait to read more of it. I have no complaints and only positive things to say , great writing, great growth description ect. I look forward to you writing more!
Esuna
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Putting all 5s to counteract the SJW kink shaming moron above me. All I am really seeing is a story deep rooted in common bondage themes. While I am not super into them, the expansion was nice enough, certainly not psychotic or rapey, seeing how the victim in question was screaming for more within minutes of being tied up. Seriously, kid, grow a pair and kindly fuck off with your judgmental holier than thou ramblings when talking about writen fetish porn.
A Concerned Citizen
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
This is psychotic rape and kidnap. Disgusting use of victims wanting it deep down. Yes, there are in depth descriptions and few badly written sentenances. But this is such a deeply unsettling story from such a twisted perspective, it's too filthy, even for a smut site. Unless a psychotic kidnapping and drugging turned true love is your thing.
tusdine
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
One of my alltime favorites! So milky... so sexy...
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