In the same world as the Lucy series, a young woman believes her boyfriend is cheating on her with her roommate, and decides to use the bimbifying milk to get revenge... but things don't turn out the way she planned. Had this story sitting around for awhile, don't know why I never uploaded it.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.33
Bb47
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Ok. Decent idea, rather rushed and to the point.
Roid Abuser
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I enjoyed this story a lot. I was particularly pleased to see the male turning into a superstud, as mutual growth is part of my kink.
I'd really encourage a fleshing out of the story, perhaps to fill out both the ending, but also taking some of the deux ex machina sp? out of the plot a bit. It was just a tad rushed.
Maybe her getting jealous of how her boyfriend lusted after roommate, for example.
Finally, and this is a personal thing, I'm just not into plump girls, at all. I got the impression from your description that the bimbos had fat asses. To me, a great female ass is a muscular ass with a hint of womanly fat. But then, I work out 5X a week and own a gym.
DocAutomata
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I love how your stories get straight to the point, with a good bit of absurdity mixed in. I think they sort of read like Hmanga oneshots, which is fun to see in erotic fiction.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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