Mia falls ill with a wasting disease, but fortunately for her the disease gives her the ability to get back what she has lost.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.71
- BE: 3.43
- Characters: 3.86
- Technical: 3.86
Robert
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
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The Martian
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I absolutely loved this story. Attribute theft is my favourite theme of all and this one did it perfectly. Your other stories are fantastic as well but for me this one stands above the others for that reason. The long timeline made it more believable as well. People changing instantly or overnight is a big problem for other stories which have to use reality bending or oblivion effects to cover it up but a constant slow theft and growth deals with that perfectly. Keep up the great work!
The Martian
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Excellent story I loved the slow buildup where its not immediately apparent that her growth isnt just normal recovery from the illness until she just continues to improve beyond where she was before getting sick and eventually realises her power and begins using it to her benefit
Deux Anges
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Good story I liked the stealing of boobs from other girls idea My only comment is that there wasnt quite enough descriptions of her boobs and a bit of boob play would be nice too Nevertheless its enjoyable Keep up the good work
Roid Abuser
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Enjoyed the story Have her meet a boy with the same power Then have them meet Superman and Wonder Woman
Nikochan
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Really nice attribute tefth story Good job
GeoffK
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
In case anyone is worried this is a real storynot a virus Its a typical BE vampire story where a girl steals beauty and bust size Its fairly welldone although it never really clicked for me
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