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A molding-clay stress toy has interesting effects on a man's wife.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.00
Meloa Epiphany
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I was almost surprised that the effects of the toy were similar to the effects of the so-called "voodoo doll." However, the descriptive nature of the story could use improvement. Example: When the wife is feeling invisible hands all over her body, it is possible that she could have leaned against the kitchen countertop to keep herself from collapsing in ecstasy; unfortunately, the story does not indicate a specific reaction on her part other than the general accumulation of sexual tension. The story was just a tad under the "excellent" category, but it was a very close runner-up.
Anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
A fairly good story that came off as a little short.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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