The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Sofa King
Unknown
Queen Of The Flies
Stranded on a deserted island, a group find themselves being transformed by a mysterious beast.
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 qwer
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 2 
Unpleasant. Not very well written. But there are some good ideas there. Try again!
 Test
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3 
Testing the comments
 DarkHeart
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1 
A very horrible mockery of the Lord of the Flies. The writing was atrocious, difficult to follow and no coherancy, the characters were so two dimensional they were almost one dimensional. 
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