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Jack has a unique problem that she's not sure how to handle. Every day, she's getting sexier and sexier, and nobody seems to notice the difference. This wouldn't be a problem for most women. The big issue for Jack is she used to be a man.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 2.50
- Technical: 5.00
silentreader
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
This is definitely more in the vein as a short story or a vignette.
That being said, I rather enjoyed it. Too many BE stories these days seem to have endings where everything is resolved. Where the protagonist wins and can control their size at will for example. It's good to see something different.
You definitely could have done more with the BE descriptions. The pictures were very nice though.
Wish we could have seen Jack interact with other people more.
A quick, great read none the less.
JJM75
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 5
Just a few comments.
I like the overall outline, but the story is too short. You should flesh it out more.
Also, unresolved reasons for change just leave the audience confused and wanting answers. The character has no personality, and is just kinda "flat"...
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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