Criticism is always accepted!
Email me at thedoctor_1963@yahoo.com for any questions, comments, or possible ideas!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 3.00
Vahktang
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
You missed an opportunity. You could have changed Amber's work outfit to some sort of fetish outfit, change it to a nationwide chain. Could have been quite fun.
Dperks
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I really like the reality altering aspect of BE when everyone else thinks that is always how it has been. Keep up the good work, but as the previous person stated take some more time to proofread. Also your description of the growth could be a little more descriptive. Don't be afraid to spend some time and really flesh out the changes. One other thing, the bra sizes you used aren't correct. You describe her as being thin but she has a bra size of 44G. It would more likely be 34 or 36G and maybe the actual measurement around the fullest part of her bust would be 44". Just some thoughts, please don't take any offence. Very good foundation so far though!
a. person
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I really appreciate that you're contributing to the site, and you have a good imagination and sense for smut. Still, your work could use quite a bit of proofreading. Please don't let that dissuade you from continuing to write, though!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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