A science nerd and a sexy classmate's science fair project trigger a scientific breakthrough that will have unintended consequences later. This is the opening act and a slow burn as far as the actual growth is concerned.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.50
- BE: 2.75
- Characters: 3.50
- Technical: 4.50
JJM75
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
The technical aspects of your writing are 100% spot on.
The story itself is kinda... just not erotic at all... I mean it's a GOOD story, but I just can't fap to this, ya know?
Too much off stage stuff... and just when you're getting to the good stuff, we fast forward 3 months?
nikochan
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
nice introduction. Hope to read the following episode soon.
gurrrno
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
moar!
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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