Everyone enjoys a BE story, but what about the nipples? Trying to come up with something I haven't seen before. There's BE here, but it's more...concentrated. Have fun
As always, spell-check and Grammar in Word, punch-up in Edit Minion.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.67
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 4.33
- Technical: 4.17
kaoru18
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really loved the story, and hope to see more like it from you! Excellent writing style. Do you post just to OverflowingBra, or other sites as well? Catch me at kaoru18@yahoo.com if you'd like ^.^
eyeguy
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
It's refreshing to see real, thinking people in these stories. Thanks!~
Slack
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
That was fun. Not enough stories of this type. Some inconsistency in measuring, with some things measured across and some around, but that's my only critique. Good job overall.
Gnarl
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I loved it! The BE was there, but I was hoping there would be more of it. I enjoyed the characters and only noticed one or two small writing mistakes other than the size related ones mentioned in another review.
OdysseusII
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I very much enjoyed it. My main beef is that you clearly don't have much of an understanding of bra sizes, which was jarring. H cups wouldn't be able to handle areolae (that's the word, btw, not aureole) the size of plates. Also, DDs are only 5 inches from the ribcage and are an average size, not some enormous size (which is how society treats the size.) Common mistakes, but still jarring, esp. when Hs are treated as utterly massive. Look at bra sizes on boobpedia, and a good frame of reference is: sophisticatedpair.com/bra-size-calculator/
Ktc
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Very enjoyable, if not over too soon! I docked you on description and characters as though they are enjoyable it's too short to really getuch of either.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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