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The Overflowing Bra

Boob Note Part 3
Chris has learned most of the ins and outs of the Boob Note, but he's only scratched the surface of what is capable with it.

He uses his date with Penelope as an excuse to see what it can really do and makes his first real misstep with the Boob Note.

Has he let his powers as a new found Boob God go to his head?  Only time will tell.

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Russian Judge
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 1

What the heck kind of text formatting is this? A standard .txt file should open up in Windows Notepad perfectly. This one is showing no carriage returns or linefeeds. This probably would have gotten better ratings from me if I could have read the thing.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Loved it, however ... I wondered where parts 1 and 2 were, until I googled your name ... You're on OFB under two names, the other with a space between Shamus and Baran.
So now I'm happy, with all three parts of this excellent tale.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Really excellent. Keep up the good work!

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