A short story I wrote for a friend and my first BE story.
Lupe struggled with freedom as her parents controlled her every move growing up. In college, she finally experiences freedom until she discovers her "master" who has the ability to maker her do whatever he wants. Given the option to stay or leave before their first sexual escapade, she chooses to stay.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 1.50
- BE: 2.00
- Characters: 1.50
- Technical: 3.00
mtb
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
No character development, poor structure and lack of any real environmental description leave this wanting. Next.
JJM75
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
This could have been far more fleshed out. It seemed rushed. No character development. The BE was kinda sketchy. I would have liked to see a lot more detail in the sex scenes.
Overall, not worth my time.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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