My first real foray into writing, I would really appreciate any feedback! I tried to check it for obvious errors.
Be forewarned, in these first few pages there is not a whole lot of BE, and the focus is on a Futa character. More straightup BE will be coming!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.40
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 4.20
- Technical: 4.80
KeithCC
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This review applies to all 4 past of the story combined.
The writing was high quality. Not much BE to describe, but the growth and cum descriptions were really really good.
Characters were relatable.
Only thing I didn't like, and it is a matter of personal taste, is the typical American BBW flabby hugeness. I see this so much in fiction from the USA. Are you guys starving so badly there that being fat is something elusive exotic and rare?
I prefer my futas reasonably athletic and able to handle their enormous dicks and sexual appetites.
But anyways, I gave the story a 4 for overall enjoyment.
Tailsko
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
A great start, but needs much more! Please continue on with this.
anon
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Decent. Ended before it really got going, though.
technocarwash
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Nope
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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