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Your dick is pumping up her tits.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.83
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 2.67
- Technical: 4.17
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 1, Technical= 5
Excellent short story of BE. No plot needed on this one.
Dexter Sinister
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Who needs character names? Who needs plot? Certainly not this piece. Wonderful bit of writing.
me
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Good mechanics, could have used a bit more plot, physics felt a bit overly suspended (for some reason I actually was thinking to myself, "They'll get smothered, why not adjust position so they they're laying on her breasts once they're that big?").
Overall good for a quick wank piece, actually high quality by those standards. The spelling, grammar, imagery and amount of expansion are great for quick piece. Unlike some I like plot, though, so I hope that you branch out to longer pieces some day, with names and such so that you have characters worthy of such lovely proportions.
ktc
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
I actually think that as far as writing quality goes this was fine.Very quick sex romp with 0 setup. The expansion did feel quick but it wasn't bad per say. It is legible, its quick and to the point and sometimes that's all you need. Look forward to more from you.
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I really enjoyed this story. Sure there wasn't any setup but you don't need setup. Just get right into it and explain it as you go. This author did that and it didn't disrupt the story at all. Too often this site is filled with stories written by people who want to give you ten pages of character development before they even mention the main character's breasts. This story is sex from beginning to end and actually pretty well written. There are a few grammatical errors but nothing that ruins the story.
Daichi Azure
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
If this was you first attempt in making a story, not bad.
Found three key issues with this story
1) Plot unknown other than breasts are getting bigger
2) Who are the main people in the story
3) What initially caused this to begin with.
Other issues:
a) Growth was to "Quick" to garner any enjoyment
b) Characters felt like a copy-pasta of each other as they didn't show any inkling of humanity in them
c) No build up as to why they are in the situation you have them depicted in
Only good thing I can say was the grammar was tolerable
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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