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Average Scores:
- Overall: 1.00
- BE: 2.00
- Characters: 1.00
- Technical: 3.00
Daichi Azure
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
If this was you first attempt in making a story, not bad.
Found three key issues with this story
1) Plot unknown other than breasts are getting bigger
2) Who are the main people in the story
3) What initially caused this to begin with.
Other issues:
a) Growth was to "Quick" to garner any enjoyment
b) Characters felt like a copy-pasta of each other as they didn't show any inkling of humanity in them
c) No build up as to why they are in the situation you have them depicted in
Only good thing I can say was the grammar was tolerable
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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