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The Overflowing Bra

Dexter Sinister
Eëa Trial One: Arrival
Sidney arrives on Eëa Island to participate in a long-term drug trial.  The island resort has been turned over to the trials, and all manner of strange results are afoot.  The other subjects, including Sidney's housemates and neighbors, don't bat an eye.  If anything, the bizarre effects of the drug just get them horny.  What is happening on Eëa and to what purpose? And will Sidney get to the bottom of it all or succumb to the merry lust that blankets the island?
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Miss Lany
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

Clearly some people here still don't understand how file types work, so anyone who sees a giant wall of text should just open the file in something else.

For the story itself, well, there's very little story and the setup was quick. There was pretty much just an orgy after a quick setup, which I'm sure some people like, but anyone wanting more would be disappointed a little. It's a decent start though.

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I opened this text file in Notepad, Notepad++, WordPad, Windows 8.1 preview mode thru the file explorer, and Apache Open Office 4.1.1.

The ONLY app that had a problem was Notepad. Notepad! A piece of leftover DOS crap that Microsoft should be ashamed to still be distributing.

The Almighty Popo
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

I'm gonna have to side with Citizen of grammar on this one. I couldn't make it past the first few sentences because of the giant block of text. Paragraphs are your friend, buddy.

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Fun! Look forward to more (with more BE, for sure)!

Opens in Chrome just fine.

Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Decent, no much BE, but well written.

To the guy complaining about the wall of text, it's saved with unix-style line endings, so notepad will shit itself. It works fine in any proper text editor.

Citizen of grammar
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Holy crap that's a wall of text, would it really take that much effort to format it in word or pdf, with actual paragraphs?

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