Since I've had some hints about putting more expansion in stories, here's one that's all expansion. There's a minor amount of 'world building' that can safely be ignored.
Sadly, there's not any 'real' sex in it (mainly kissing and groping), though I could tack something on the end, if people really want it. But then it wouldn't be expansion.
Just an experiment in getting a woman's point of view, and a different way of doing it. Have fun
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.33
- BE: 3.33
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.67
Miss Lany
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
The story had a good setup and clearly a lot of thought put into the setting and characters. The actual BE wasn't described much and the story ended before much could be done with it, but it was a nice story for a quick BE if that's what someone wants.
Recluse
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Good story. I haven't seen much better, but I feel it's not quite 5 star material. I don't know why.
aitchbee
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great combination of magical BE and alternate history. Loved the reference to the song title "She Blinded Me with Science"!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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