Bigmacdaddy87@aol.com
I wanted to share fantasies I've had with the community, so I decided to post this. It's not good, I'm not a writer, but If I get any sort of feedback, I may continue this series of one-offs to provide some content for once. Be brutally honest if you comment please.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.67
- BE: 4.33
- Characters: 4.67
- Technical: 5.00
deus
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Nice! This is a great teaser, but I would love to see more of this. Perhaps you could extend the story with another chapter? Thanks for sharing.
Muad
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Keep the stories coming! This one was awesome! :D
bobGrimer
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
The only reason you lost points is it was too short! Pacing was on point for the length though. I would definitely like to see more from you.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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