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The Overflowing Bra

one_eyed_jack
The Glamorous Life - a BE quickie
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Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4 
There were a few spelling errors that were pretty "under the radar" and able to be ignored...
Not sure what the point of the A/C guy was... or the fact that the heat was out.  You could have started the entire story in the liquor store.
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