billthedemonic@gmail.com
Here is the 3rd chapter, I hope yall enjoy. I included chapters 1 and 2 as well.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 5.00
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 3.00
Moooooore
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Moooooooooooore! All my favorite fetishes in one. Writing is improving which each chapter.
ThisGuy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I have never before posted a comment here, but my god... this stuff hits in the right place. Tongue, nipples, all with good descriptions, it's hard to find it together with BE or other transformations. I may not be some great BE stories critic, but I haven't enjoy any story that much since Ann's Worst Nightmare. Only suggestion I would have is to not rush it. Take your time with action, slow down with sex, boobs etc. in every scene. And for the love of god, don't you even dare to end it any time soon. Keep it going and one day it may become a great, big story.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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