billthedemonic@gmail.com
I hope this is better, if y'all like it, I'll release the 2nd part, which I've already written.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.36
- BE: 4.36
- Characters: 4.27
- Technical: 3.27
The Dude
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Great story... Keep it going ... Great story can't wait for part 2... Then 3 and 4 ;)
ASR
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
I really enjoyed everything about this story, especially the concept. Your descriptions of the actual process were fantastic. Like the other raters before me I was a bit distracted by the unpolished writing, but I think you have great promise if you keep at it. Looking forward to part 2!
Anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
A very good start! The story itself is excellent but you're in desperate need of a spellcheck and a proofreader. I know we aren't aiming for professional publication quality here but the problems distract from enjoyment of the story.
CleavageCuddler
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Seems like you just need to polish up some of the grammar. All-in-all a great story. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
Angry Bird
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
I believe there is always room for improvement in writing no matter what level of skill you are at. Keep working at it! This is great stuff, I love it and can't wait for you to post the next part of this story! Thanks for sharing
jj
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
love it!
its really thrilling. please more with the same style!
kung fu ass & tits style
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
pretty good wish people would do the subtle changes to body by others story types more
Beachball boobs
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 2
Very good story, would love to read more! BUT please use spell check...that was my only problem!
Anon
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Part 2 Please, I second "Hey"
hey
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Hey
Post the next part
Do it.
Erisian
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Basically, I have nothing purely negative to say. You're writing seems like it's unpolished, but I hope you just take that as encouragement to keep doing it. This story has the potential to be EXTREMELY hot, it's a great kinky premise. Thanks for writing!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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