Maddie and Lauren are just two cute college students working at the local video store. However, their worlds are turned upside down when they are kidnapped by mysterious men in a white van and taken to a remote location.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.00
- BE: 2.57
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 3.29
kathy
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really liked this story. You incorporated my favorite elements. subdued.... forced but not mean. forced to stay in their lives instead of in a lab or hidden away.
this was cool
thanks
G-man001
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Overall the story is good and you can even get some characterization in such a small amount of text. The problem is you're missing an ending. They got big...but then nothing happens.
namazuros
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I'm not even into WG stories, but this was pretty enjoyable and fun. I'd imagine if you were into that sort of thing, you'd probably get a kick out of this story. Well written, with a fun scenario. Lots of clothing being ripped apart too, which is always nice!
Geoffk
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I really like WG stories, so this was very nice for me. It's well-written and technically perfect except for one typo (swapped "too" for "two"). If you like authors like JP, than it will be right up your alley.
The BE is really incidental to the weight gain, but wasn't badly described. If you hate the idea of women fattening up, though, then this isn't the story for you. Lots of nice clothes popping and bursting, button-popping, etc.
I'd like to see more from him. Nicely done, I think.
MysteryGuy9215
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Not nearly as bad as the trolls below are making it out to be, but still not my cup of tea. No real BE in this, mostly WG focused.
Smart Guy
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
combo breaker dood
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
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