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Flores keeps suffering from bouts of pleasure that make her breasts grow when she climaxes. Can she figure out a way to make it stop? Does she want it to? (My first story, so feedback would be appreciated.)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.38
- BE: 2.75
- Characters: 3.13
- Technical: 3.25
Mike
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very well done. My preference would be for more descriptive breast expansion, but overall one of the best I've ever read!
Onii-sama
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Would like to see more. Contrary to others, I liked Flores' personality, and the slight change to at the end was interesting.
maybeenuf4u
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I truly enjoyed the story because it was unique. You turned a gay guy into a boob guy. I also liked that you took the time to say that the BE was NOT from the fat distribution technique. I did have a little trouble figuring out that she had to cum to grow. I didn't see any typos but then thats just me. Perhaps something to the character of Flores being "unbelievable" I would have called it unrealistic. As I said I did enjoy the story. Keep up the good work and hopefully you can provide more soon!
daichi azure
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Story wise it was good, but it seems that the development of the characters was lacking. Plus typographical errors were a detraction from it
ac
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Not bad. The overall plot seemed a little... odd? Like you had the idea for one of the scenes and scaffolded out the rest of the story to fit. Flores' personality is very hard to relate to or believe, and that makes her change as the story progresses ring hollow.
Smart Guy
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
ktc1221
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I rather liked it myself. I've read so many bad stories for BE that I would certainly not throw this one in the mix. As dues recommended,there were quite a few typos and odd sentences but overall it felt complete enough to me. Your BE descriptions could be better, as I personally like it when their size is compared to something to give a visual for your reader. You don't have to say "like watermelons" or "basketballs" nor do you have to use measurements but even something like "her arms could no longer reach each other as she grew" adds quite a bit of flavor to me. Just food for thought.
deus
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
I tried, but I couldn't get through this. The typos kept pulling me out of the story. Please go back and edit your story. There are places where you seem to have edited but didn't remove the prior phrasing, as well as some awkward sentences that could be rewritten.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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