Apologies for the double upload, but it came to my attention that I had accidentally included an incomplete earlier version of the third chapter of A Gift and a Test, one that left off the most plot-relevant scenes and the biggest (if silliest and slapstickiest) BE! My apologies for this carelessness. The complete version was included in the plain text version in the last download package, but I decided to reupload with the complete one in Microsoft Word for your convenience. Enjoy the five new pages!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.83
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 4.67
- Technical: 4.83
Murgen
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Before I get into my review just a heads up for you BE fans: This story has more than enough BE as well as big insertions, tons of cum (possibly literal tons) and is definitely well-made so don't worry, the story doesn't get in the way. It's top notch fetish madness.
Okay, this is fuckin' ridiculous, but I gotta say, this has some the best, if not the best writing I've seen on The OFB. And I don't say it lightly. In fact, as soon as I read that intro about Las Vegas I could see you have more talent as an author than just being able to write great, crazy sex/expansion scenes. That kind of detail is unprecedented and totally unnecessary in porn, but it makes this story stand out like no other.
The world you built here is a magnificent vision of the future. It's got Google cars that drive themselves, computer AI's you can pay rent to use, and it would seem that every single person has a unique superpower. Even when this story isn't about the sexytimes it's still an enjoyable read. And yet, it's also hilarious just because it seems serious one moment and the next moment I'm reminded that it's still just a story from the Internet about a man with a super-dick.
So just let me say this: I would totally read a story by you that had no porn at all and was focused entirely on this fun storytelling you seem so good at. xD
Reno
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Really enjoying the stories so far and can't wait for the next instalment. You've had a couple of characters that have had some elasticity, how about a lady with total elasticity that he could copy? It would make for some really wild sex scenes. Just a thought.
clibretto
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Absolutely fantastic. I love the world you've created and the characters that inhabit it. I am eagerly anticipating the next installment.
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Keep up the great work! Your story is one I can't get enough of and can't wait to see what happens next.
William.Starfox
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Love the character development. Jack is a great character. The supporting characters are well developed. It's going to be interesting to see what Ms. Westwick is all about.
jmsnowy10
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
That was amazing! I won't repeat everything I said in the previous post but I thought there was a little missing. Man, now I'm seeing how our hero can save the day!! Awesome job and don't take too long on the next part
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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