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The Overflowing Bra

Coffee Pilot
Fantastic Desire chapters 1-2
Kay always fantasized about mythical worlds full of faeries, satyrs, nymphs, dragons, and such. She's an average woman, a bookstore manager with a sweet, if boring boyfriend and a below average love life. Then one day, she happens across Keelin at the Renaissance Festival, who merrily passes on to her the Ring of Desire, which bends the wearer's mind and body to the dreams of those around them. Explaining that it will help spice things up and solve her unfulfilled needs, she even gives a demonstration by amping up Kay's sex-drive. Dramatic transformations and much frolicking ensue as first her boyfriend, then Kay herself take turns wearing the ring, for Kay's dreams of hot bodies and wild sex in a fantasy world soon have both their bodies changing in quite lusty ways.

The Ring of Desire returns! In this brief, (only four chapters, I swear!) side-story which takes place concurrently with the later chapters of 'Fitting in at the Ren-Faire'. Functions as a stand-alone tale - reading the Ren-Faire stories beforehand is good, but not necessary.

Please comment if you enjoy! Feedback is the drug that makes me keep writing! Also you can find me on DA.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This was great, I love the weird transformation stuff that goes on it just makes it all that much more interesting to me. Also, the story keeps it's momentum and doesn't go too long without fun stuff happening. I'd love to see more.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

I very much enjoyed it, and look forward to more, I'm exited to see more transformations in kay

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Some excellent transformations and sex scenes here -- Kay giving a blowjob in Chapter 2 is especially hot. Definitely looking forward to future parts, and future "trouble" being caused by the ring.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I thought this was terrific. I definitely though it was parts 1-2 of a longer story, but it was very fun.

The guy with the thing
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

It was good, but I think you need to work on ending your stories. both of your stories are good from beginning to middle, but fitting in at the rennaisance fair went on too long and got worse as it went on, and this story was really anticlimactic and seemed like it ended right before it was about to get REALLY good

Coffee Pilot
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Pretty sure its just a troll who didn't even read it. Some people seem to think a request for feedback is an excuse to be a dick

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I don't mind people calling out shit if it's actually bad, but this is far from it. Great read, love your stuff. Thanks for writing.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I'm not sure what story the reviewer before me was reading but I found this quite enjoyable and would like to see more.

Roid Abuser
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This was a great story. Not normally into even partial inter-species transformation (except perhaps the penis, and you had that covered), but this great and the transformation mild.

Smart Guy
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Absolute shit

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