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Part 2 of the Swap is here!! After the cliffhanger of the last part we get to see just what has been happening to Mia and the rest of the women in the world. Plus, Michael goes to work for the first time after the Swap. What surprises are in store for our protagonists? Please rate and comment. I take into account everything and thanks to the user Russian Judge I have added new story elements. (Included are parts 1 and 2. Part 2 starts on page 11.)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.12
- BE: 3.41
- Characters: 4.41
- Technical: 4.35
ben569
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
A tasteful story with an interesting plot and - I hope - a good sequel that will arrive soon !
Tailsko
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A great addition! Can't wait to see more. Rating on just the new parts here and would recommend keeping each part as a separate post, or as separate files in the same post. Keep it up, can't wait for this to get closer to the climax of the story!
Bob
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Jason G
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
no sense in repeating all the praise - your writing is great! all i can say is in the way you save the files. either make each chapter/part/installment its own file, or make links to each part in a sort of table of contents. not every device renders the document the same. when viewing a .doc or .docx on my phone, there are NO page numbers. as this story grows, it will be harder for people like me to skip the parts we've already read to get to the new content. other than that, i have nothing negative to say! keep writing how YOU wanna write, and pay no mind to worthless coments like "smart guy" at the bottom here.
Icantreadthis
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Could you make another version in a more accessible format?
ApesMa
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I agree about making the division between parts clearer.
It might be hard to do having started out first person from Michael's POV, but it would be great to have part of the story from Mia's POV. I'm hoping that after a few waves she'll be able to pleasure herself orally, and I'd also like to see Michael and Mia marry and start a family
JennysBanana
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
This story is so much fun. It feels like you're feeling around in the world and getting a hang on things...I like the world building and varied transformations, as well as the changing physical and political dynamics between characters as they struggle to cope with he swap. Not so much B.E, but that's alright as I'm sure it will pick up. Hope you continue onwards, looking forward to the next installment.
Siggy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Love your work. Excellent workbuilding. Great details really make this the Best Story going. Please keep 'em coming!
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Please continue writing, the majority of your reading audience will probably never say anything but we all appreciate anything that's put out. The biggest things for me is comprehension and uniqueness, as there's so many stories already that being entirely original is not expected. Your story is enjoyable and your cliffhangers are too soon.
lol
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Please continue. I love this serie. I hope women continue to grow at all the right places ;)
Russian Judge
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I'm surprised at the low ratings for this story. jmsnowy10 is clearly still thinking through what this universe means. Thanks for having men starting to grow breasts...but I'd suggest that women would be keeping theirs, no matter what else happens. This world has been faced with something a lot of people want to suppress and ignore - sexuality. This is bound to start showing up on TV, in entertainment, and in less and less censorship of nudity and eroticism. But how will people integrate this new sexuality, and still make it to work on Monday to do their jobs? If men are starting to grow breasts, will they like the silky smooth bras, or more macho versions (denim, corderoy, pinstripe)? Will women with penises be developing softer, smoother underwear to hold their equipment? Keep imagining and writing, jmsnowy10!
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Lily Bunny
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
This was sort of a lackluster chapter, which is frustrating because I love the setup and I know I will love it when it gets going. Hopefully this will build up to the great story I know it can be.
FeyOne
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I'm really impressed with this so far. Looking forward to Part 3.
I gave a low BE Description rating only because there was really only one in this installment and it wasn't described. The quality of your setup and descriptions for things, however, is excellent. So don't take it as a negative - I'm expecting awesome things when our main character finally goes through his. :)
The Light Fantastic
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Really well done and an intriguing premise. Keep going!
silentreader
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent addition to the series you started. How appropriate to end it with another huge cliffhanger. While those are annoying, I do enjoy your writing style. I wanted to give you a lower rating on the "BE Description" due to it only occuring a seldom few times but they were described well despite their shorness.
Looking forward to part 3.
PS: It might be a better i idea to split the story into separate parts in the future so that people know exactly where the newest part starts without having to reread what they already have.
Smart guy
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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