jmsnowy10@gmail.com
A new era has come upon the earth! The Swap has changed the lives on each and every single person on the planet and will continue to do so for the foreseeable future.
This is the first part of an ongoing story that I write in my spare time. Please do not expect Part 2 to come anytime soon. Be warned the Swap is extremely weird (for some) and is not a normal one.
This is also my first story I've tried to write so comments and criticism is welcomed.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.46
- BE: 3.77
- Characters: 4.15
- Technical: 4.31
BB47
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This isn't really my bag. After reading a mountain of these stories on this site and other sites, I understand that there are a number of people who are turned on by the prospect of changing to the opposite sex and then taking it up a notch. In that realm of eroticism, I only really find futa to be hot, because the woman isn't taking away, but adding to her sexuality. So my overall enjoyment of your work is a bit lackluster.
The BE is low in quantity so far.
But your descriptions and characters and technical are great.
Jason G
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
well written, with errors being few and far between. great setup and story so far, and a cliffhanger ending where you stopped - like a friday comic strip before a long weekend. here's hoping you can continue your story, since it's original and seems to be pretty well thought out.
Nobody
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Well done! Very enjoyable.
Miranai
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
A really great work, can't wait to see part two. While excellent, could use a bit more in the breast growth, but I'm sure that will really start up in a later chapter.
Slith
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great story. Nice cliffhanger. I can't wait to see the protagonist grow a rack. Please continue with this tale.
brrrr?
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I usually don't go for this type of story, but you did it very well and I encourage you to keep going!
Russian Judge
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I agree that there should be more character involved in the stories. And I believe the Swap should be a bit more random. Men should start developing breasts, too; not all men, just some. And some women should develop male muscles and strength. Children past the age of puberty should be Swapped, too, with their parents having to cope with that as well as their own Swapped bodies. Finally, the Swap phenomena has called attention to sex, something a lot of people have been suppressing. I suspect the big effect of the Swap would be everyone being more aware, and more tolerant, of sex in all its forms. (Maybe that's why it happened?)
Apple
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great start to what could be one of the better series. Please continue!
LXI
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I enjoyed reading that. Thank you for writing it!
Looking forward the next parts. :)
silentreader
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Not gonna lie, I started reading this story thinking it was titled "The Swamp."
Good story, I will patienty wait for part 2. Can't wait to see how this story grows.
Minster
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Like you story. Please continue.
What'sMissing?
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
My thoughts... hmm, I actually really enjoyed it. You're right, it is bizarre, but in a fun, semi-sexy way. The transformation bits were great, which is where I think the most disappointment comes from...there just weren't enough of them! Now that the world exists I really hope you continue it. Preferably soon, because while the world is still fresh in our minds, it would be nice to explore it further. Also, would recommend adding more character description- it's a bit lacking. They are currently pretty one dimensional, bring a little life to them. They still had hobbies and interests before the switch. Good work!
Tth
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Nice start! I like your story, don't take too long to write the next parts, please.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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