jf-hf@t-online.de
This is my first story, please be gentle ;)
Fell free to translate or illustrate it...
Jennifer comes into prison and have to produce milk. She fall in love with another prisoner and want to stay with her, but it only works when she get bigger...
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.83
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 3.67
- Technical: 3.67
RedGhost
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Ich genoss das! Bitte halten Sie schriftlich.
Danke.
Laby
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Tolle Idee, tolle Erzählweise aber leider ein bisschen Detailarm.
(Beschreibung der Gefängnisse, vielleicht Erwähnung von Veränderungen. Ich hatte so z.B. bei den Gefängnissen einen Plattenbau vor dem inneren Auge - in 100 Jahren? Möglicherweise nicht :) )
English: Nice Idea, nice quality und a little less details. (Descriptions of the jails and the rest which could have changed in 100 years.)
Endlich mal was Deutsches :)
Soliloquy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
To offset the idiot asking for a translation with 1's.
I too, read it with google translate. Solid plot, can't speak to the technical aspects for obvious reasons. =P
PsyUnder
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Red
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
This is good, and has some real possibilities. I did a Googletranslate (which IS pretty rough), and it's mostly understandable - clearly well-written. Clever plot. I got a huge kick out of the girl referring to "my balcony". What we'd call a rack, the French say a bosomy girl is a Grand Balcon. If I get some time, I might volunteer to work through a decent translation with the author.
NippleSucker
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Is there an English translation of this story?
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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