This is what has happened in Lucky so far. I have neglected the most important BE story depository and it was a mistake. If I died or something happened to my files and DA I's lose it, so better to keep a copy of it in the archives Thanks to lolchair for compiling it.
Gotta agree with MysteryGuy9215's evaluation. Been following Hattushilish and Tusdine a long time on DA, still looking forward to more of this great series.
Telling someone off whilst not leaving an actual review isn't helping the author(s) either. :I
I'm going to review this by each individual part from Prequel to Part IV, as that may be a bit more beneficial in terms of critique. This is gonna be LONG, but I hope it helps, and it doesn't all just come off as personal opinion/nitpicking (keep in mind to those who haven't read it, my review may contain potential SPOILERS, so read at your own risk). Keep in mind, if you don't wanna read through all my bantar, there is a sum up at the very end:
Prequel:
Although this held abundant growth, I felt as if there were a few too many things wrong with it. Firstly, a truly unlikeable character. Isabella, while I now know she was purposefully made to be the bitch of the story, having a one-dimensional character who is a bitch and that's all is neither interesting nor enjoyable. There's really no motive behind her obnoxious behavior other than "someone called me a boy". I guess upbringing could be an excuse, but its one I just don't buy. I felt like more could have been done with many of the other characters. Emily is the main one. She, like many others, felt like a plot device and nothing more. I know some may like the domineering, heavy headed bitchy main character, but do it TOO much and leave her with no redeeming characteristics and it just gets a bit...sour for my tastes. But this was merely the prequel, and I wouldn't write the WHOLE story off because of this at all!
Lucky I:
Now THIS part I love. This is where things get going and it gets pretty good pretty quick. Although the main character is bland and a bit of the stereotypical "geek" trope, he works for what he is trying to do, i.e. narrate the story. There's nothing that really stands out or makes him special, but I suppose that's so the reader can put themselves in their shoes easier, since this is a first person narrative? I can understand that, but a few quirks here and there never hurt. Candace is an absolute delight to read about. Her character is the very antithesis of Isabella, which is the sort of balance I wanted to see in the prequel. I wish we had a bit more backstory to her in this part, but I'm writing these as I go, so I'm hoping I learn more as the story progresses. The chemistry between Peter and Candace is convincing enough to make the story work, but I felt it to be a bit forced in places, especially with the initial meeting. But I suppose you have to start somewhere, and its a forgivable thing. Overall, this part is a huge improvement from the last, even if there was no BE actually happening.
Lucky II:
I liked where the plot was going. Up to the point with Candace's motives...it felt somewhat out of character for her to want to keep growing. Before I say anymore, I will say I have mild bias for this particular subject: I prefer when a character doesn't want to expand, rather than them wanting to. I understand Candance's reasonings and why she wants to expand. The spirit of competition is always a fun trope to work with. And I suppose if we didn't have that, this story wouldn't work as well in the long run. I just wish it could've gone a bit differently. Like Candace didn't know she was taking them, Peter slipped them into her food on accident, or she mistakes the pills for candy because of their scent and hijinks insue, then she becomes addicted to growth and all that good stuff. But her just wanting to be bigger straight out the gate is a bit boring for my own tastes. But I want to make it clear that those are my own personal tastes - some will absoultely LOVE where you are taking the plot in this part. Some, such as myself, will not. But I do occasionally make exceptions when it is done very well. Nonetheless, I'm thrilled that Candance is joining in on the fun - I was a bit afraid that she was going to be left out! The only other complaint about this part that I have is its abrupt and awkward ending. Luckily, the next part follows right away, so its not too distracting.
Lucky III:
It seems that the more stories I read, the better it gets. This part was very focused, and very well done. The measurements scene, while a bit cliche at this point, was well done and fun. But the scene in the lab at the very end, with the "cliffhanger" was my favorite moment so far. Cannot wait to read more, I am slowly getting hooked on this!
Lucky IV:
I know I'm starting to sound like a broken record, but this was the best chapter yet! :P The dream sequence was amazing and very well executed. I'm starting to enjoy her enthusiasm for expansion to some degree. Now, I think I'll stop here and give my overall thoughts on the story:
Overall, this is a very impressive story. Is it the very best I have ever read? Admittedly, no. Some descriptions are lacking, characters take a while to get interesting, and the BE can feel rushed at times, while it actually happens. But it is focused on boobs and boob related things the whole time, which makes this a fantastic read. There were also a few noticeable grammatical issues throughout the story, to the point where they were mildly distracting, as well as some randomly blank pages, which is why technical is a 4. While this doesn't strike me as anything truly unique, its definitely not a paint-by-numbers expansion story. It is just unique enough to be something special, and I am glad you put it up here for others to enjoy. Keep up the awesome work!
"Guess I will pass on reading this one"
You haven't read it...then why did you rate it? People like you are the reason why so few BE stories are written lately.
Wack formatting. Cant edit font size and or make it into a readable pdf for my portable pocket device. Guess I will pass on reading this one.